Let's try, Shall we?

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So, I have been writing a bunch of stories for the past year since December 2010? wow that's barely half a year!
Well, all of my stories are based on a romantic relationship with two male characters...two ANIME male characters.
My stories have always been a rated T for Teens type...and I really want to do a rated M for Mature audiences
mostly because I know how it'll go but my problem is that I just can't seem to write it down 

I tried a lot and once I get into the flow I can write some hot stuff but once it starts to get 'fiesty' I can no longer continue...T-T

So yeah here's a sample of my attempt of writing something close enough to a scene of rated M goodness 

It's from my fanfiction for the anime Katekyo Hitman Reborn based on the characters Hibari x Tsuna. Here you go :



"He hungrily kissed Tsuna's plump moist lips. Tsuna moaned at the forcefulness allowing Hibari access inside his hot mouth. Hibari took it and darted his tongue inside. Lapping their mouths together, breathing heavily. His hands were firmly gripping Tsuna's cheeks. Tsuna's back was roughly pushed against the hard walls as Hibari continued to take the dominate role of a highly deprived lover. He easily slid his legs in between Tsuna's weakening ones. Tsuna was rapidly losing his strength to stand on his own and was happy for the support he was getting from both Hibari and the wall. Hibari as instantly as he attacked Tsuna's lips moved to corrupt his unblemished neck. Kissing and biting making sure to leave as many marks as possible. He specifically bit in the small gap that connected Tsuna's neck to his shoulder causing Tsuna to moan lustfully. He poked his tongue onto the sensitive skin earning another soft moan."


So yeah...I write and it sounds hot and I read it and it sounds weird...*mental sigh*

I need help! What do you think? Am I doing okay? Do I need serious help? An impossible question; Do you possible know why I just cannot go any further in this writing?

Thanks for reading!
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(If you can) Please help me!